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Though I walk through the valley of shadow and death
I see no reason to be afraid
The road sign says it’s five miles to hell
Straight ahead
And a light year to heaven hard left
But I follow the sign due west
And make my home six feet from irony
In a willow made out of bones

As I walk through this shaded realm with death
Each step I take is emboldened
And death is increasingly annoyed
Without doubt
These wounds upon me should stop me
I should be getting weak
But I make paint of the blood coming from me
And write a poem; taking my time

Though the shadows of death and hell are creeping
I cannot feel fear
The air is cool and crisp
Slight breeze
I scratch a line from my poem
Ponder on nothing for a moment
(If nothing is truly nothing, then why is it a word?)
I shrug my shoulders lightly

And go right back to work
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Author's Comments

*clears throat*
Ladies and gentlemen
It's starting to work more and more.

This one took me half an hour, which means I'm going back a few steps, but at least it turned out quite alright!

Now, a few notes.

In case you didn't get the humour in the lines:
And make my home six feet from irony
In a willow made out of bones

...it's a crack on death. Six feet=six feet under, willow made out of bones=skeleton, and thus...this home is six feet from irony.

And then, as another point of humour, I thought I'd let you know that I scratch a line from my poem=I did scratch a line from my poem. Originally, it would've went like this:
But I make paint of the blood coming from me
And graffiti attack deaths scythe

But I decided that it would be better to keep the humour subtle. :D

Yes, I started out writing this poem in an entirely gloomy, grumbly mood. The first line it's self was inspired by the movie Meet Joe Black ("You are looking at a man who's not walking through the valley of the shadow of death, he's galloping into it...and my daughter has fallen in love with death")
Clearly, it steered far from there.

in closing, "Is not your time now." "Make it time." "You canno' fool wit' the way t'ings got to be."

If you have not seen that movie, go, rent it, watch it, you'll love it.

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:iconelementalfae:
i really like this. a lot. the humor, although subtle, was perfect. :+favlove:

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~decus et verum~
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:icontwilite-crescent:
Thank you very much!
*bows*
And thank you for the favourite!
I feel very honoured. ^_^

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:iconlostindeath101:
I've just seen that recently, deary! I had no idea that's what it was about. It's been laying around the house for years, but I've never watched it. Then it was on the SciFi channel the other day so I popped in. It was grand!

As is the poem. Totally marv. I shall tell Mal at once. This will brighten her day.

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:iconelementalfae:
you're quite welcome. :)

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~decus et verum~
//"[Man's] tragedy is the impossibility- or at least the tremendous difficulty- of communication." - Faulkner\\
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:icontwilite-crescent:
Yes, it's an amazing movie.
You should get it for me for my birthday this year :P
lol, thank you very much, sisseh ^_^
haha, yay for making mal happy! (:

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"Danger! Bad MoFo in da house!" -~AthenaNekoAstraea
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:iconlostindeath101:
I shall! Wait, then you know what I'm getting you! ACK!

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I am the Queen of Conflict.  I sit on the throne of argument.I hold a scepter made of the finest aggrivation and live in the Palace of Injustice.The Prince of Discord is heir to the throne.
:icontwilite-crescent:
lol, then you can get me that, and something that costs a dollar or less, hm?

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:iconlostindeath101:
*glares* No way. Anything less than fifteen is not worth you. I already have it all planned out. ^_^ No worries.

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I am the Queen of Conflict.  I sit on the throne of argument.I hold a scepter made of the finest aggrivation and live in the Palace of Injustice.The Prince of Discord is heir to the throne.
:icontwilite-crescent:
lol, but the movie itself will cost you twenty!!!
*grumble*
fine, I won't argue

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