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Once bitten, twice shy
She feels the difference
But inside she’s still too wounded
To trust him

She feels safe in his arms
But once she looks away she remembers
Her trust should not be easily given

She’s just not innocent enough
She’s just not sure of herself
She’s just simply twice shy

Once wounded, too scared
He makes her feel alive again
But inside her hearts still too cold
To let him in

She relaxes when he’s around
But once he leaves she is reminded
Pain just comes too easily

She’s just not innocent enough
She’s just not sure of herself
She’s just simply twice shy

Once she trusted...a time she can’t quite recall
She sees a different light in his eyes
But inside she’s still afraid
Afraid enough to deny

She feels at ease in his company
And though when he leaves she fears...she remembers his words
Talk of time, and love, and passion

She’s still got innocence left to give him
She’s regaining her pride in herself
She’s just simply

Shy
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something of a second part to a "two-part poem"

"first part"-->[link]

^_^ Thanks for viewing!!! :blackrose:

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:iconphyrrestar:
An interesting concept and way of expressing that particular emotion.

I must admit, one line really stood out to me:
"Once wounded, too scared"
Love it. :clap:
:icontwilite-crescent:
:glomp: Thanks so much!

It makes me feel good when people that have ten times my talent like my work!!! :heart: Thanks again!

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:iconmeeden:
expressed wonderfully - beautiful words you write!
:icontwilite-crescent:
*bows* Thanks so much! ^_^

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:iconlostindeath101:
Beautiful! Fabulous! Love it almost as much as the first bit. Truely beautiful. Did you write this after what happened last night?

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:icontwilite-crescent:
*chuckles* you already forgot reading this?

*shakes head* nah, these are the pieces I wrote a month ago, when I was still not sure about Rob.

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:iconlostindeath101:
I KNEW this sounded familiar! I knew it! Muahahaha!

Kay, glad we got that sorted.

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I am the Queen of Conflict.  I sit on the throne of argument.I hold a scepter made of the finest aggrivation and live in the Palace of Injustice.The Prince of Discord is heir to the throne.
:icontwilite-crescent:
*laughs* So am I, you poor airhead ^_^

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:iconcityonahill:
haha pretty sure i have to fave this one as well...

I FEEL LIKE THAT PERSON!! haha right now...

well done on the two partshehe

xx

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is fake a smile til bed,
roll over,
and cry myself to sleep"
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